blue

We were two
she and I

she was blue
I was lost

she was wild
I was shy

We became one
she and I

she was everywhere
she was everything

I was lost in she
she was lost in I

she permeated my world
The atmosphere was filled with her

I could feel her, sense her
as part of me

she blanketed me
like a warm summer breeze. 

she surrounded me
engulfed me
caressed me 

she lifted me.
she was I
I was she

Then we we were two
she and I

It was fun
when we were one

When we became
two 

she was lost
I was blue

24 comments:

  1. bittersweet and written so creatively!
    i really enjoyed this Grizz

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  2. Lucy - thanks, your thoughts are always kind

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  3. This is so sad! I guess I was hoping for a happy ending. A very interesting use of inverted couplets.

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  4. Granny - always an honor when you drop in. thanks

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  5. I like the wordplay here. Very well done.

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  6. Some great word play here. An excellent job.

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  7. wonderful grizz! and a beautiful flow my dear. just beautiful!

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  8. This was so touching and sad...they came full circle. Simply beautiful...

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  10. Selma - I always enjoy your comments-thanks
    Desi - thank you appreciated
    Mr. North - a great comment from the master
    gautami - thank you
    mz mouthy - nice to have you back. loved the dod story
    sweetest - thank you

    to all who spent some time with me, I truly appreciate you. Poetry is not my forte and to get favorable comments is truly gratifying.
    All who have visited me this day are very good writers and truly honor me by stopping in.

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  11. i like the beginning and end. seems like a familiar story.

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  12. Beautiful. I really liked this.

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  13. You said it perfectly
    Love found
    Love lost
    Blue
    Life goes on!

    b

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  14. Beautiful! You captured the relationship gone wrong perfectly.

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  15. Oh, I really, really like that! The effect of the shifts, the turning of the tides, blue and lost, lost and the blue. Very cool, Grizz : )

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  16. Can't beat life experience for a writing prompt eh Grizz. I hope you didn't have your heart broked though. Excellent.

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  17. Love how the cycle of poetic justice turns!

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  18. I prefer being one, I've realized, only after having experienced being two.

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  19. she was wild, I was shy...Oh Grizz, sounded doomed. she stayed long as she could, then took her free spirit off to another atmosphere, leaving you blue - I would totally open up a can of whoop-ass on her for you but she would be hard to catch as a hummingbird :)

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