carry on keats

even though
my heart aches
and a drousy numbness
pains my senses

I continue to seek
the depth of your jade green eyes
the pulse of your soul
beating with mine

I seek  the touch
of your hand
the feel of your back
the heat of your breath

please
forgive me
please
come back






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17 comments:

  1. gelNovember 22, 2009

    "the pulsing of your soul/beating with mine"/touch of your hand/...heat of your breath"-
    This poem is aching beauty.
    I sure hope she reconsiders! Would sending her this help?

    Good luck,
    Gel: One of your readers with green eyes (Gel is my abbreviation for "Green-Eyed Lady", the #1 song by Sugarloaf that is part of my past and present)

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  2. Susan Helene GottfriedNovember 23, 2009

    Yeah, gel's right. Aching beauty, absolutely.

    Beautifully done!

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  3. Rinkly RimesNovember 23, 2009

    I liked this but chiefly because it led me to the poem before! I thought that was very pithy and absolutely right even if said tongue-in-cheek!

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  4. AnonymousNovember 24, 2009

    Am sure she would forgive and come back...nice one Grizz.

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  5. Dee MartinNovember 24, 2009

    if she doesn't forgive him - she is crazy - loved this!

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  6. AnonymousNovember 24, 2009

    I have Jade green eyes! I'll come back!

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  7. AnonymousNovember 24, 2009

    Choice phrasing you have used! I love this piece, a great read!

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  8. gautami tripathyNovember 25, 2009

    That heartache..

    ode to remnants of love

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  9. Cassiopeia RisesNovember 25, 2009

    I don't know who you are but one thing I can say. This is excellent. What a loving poem.


    love, Melanie

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  10. Cassiopeia RisesNovember 25, 2009

    Oh, now I know who you are. I have been ill for a long time. It takes some time to get my head on where it should be.LO


    Melanie

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  11. AnonymousNovember 25, 2009

    Be still my heart. This was incredible. You've outdone yourself. Bravo!

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  12. LarryNovember 26, 2009

    Love all poems like this and of course She'll come back at least I hope so.
    I also want to stop by and thank You for Leaving your comment. It was nice of you to show such interest of my post.


    This Blog Of Mine

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  13. linda mayNovember 26, 2009

    I wish someone wrote something like that to me. You old romantic Grizz. That is one lovely poem.

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  14. Jane DoeNovember 26, 2009

    The longing in this poem is palpable, it radiates from the words. A beautiful piece.

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  15. Fantasies of a LifetimeNovember 27, 2009

    Lovely !

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  16. JeevesNovember 28, 2009

    Touching

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  17. lissaDecember 08, 2009

    very touching, very provoking

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