Little known to the world of walking bipeds there is a magic bear named Bartolome who lives in the forest of the black troll. Bartolome has the power to grant eternal life but only does so for creatures of the forest. Bartolome usually saves his powers for those of his own kind.
However, on one cold rainy spring day a Grizzly old hunter dressed in a bears coat and smelling like an bear himself crawled into the cave of Bartolome and whispered in a low grunting voice that he was about to die. "Bartolome," he said. ""Will you grant me eternal life?" Bartolome being half asleep and cold did not recognize the the old hunter as being a human. "What do you have for me?", Bartolome said. The old hunter was quick to reply, "I will provide you fish and berries for the next year." Well thought the old Bear, that's not a bad deal. "OK", Bartolome replied, "but for a year of fish and berries I will only give you a year of life". The old hunter thought that after he fed Bartolome for a year they would be good friends and he would get his eternal life. "OK, the hunter replied. "It's a deal."
Bartolome told the old hunter to take his clothes off. "Why?" asked the hunter. "For my power to work you must be as you entered the world", replied Bartolome. When the hunter was naked Bartolome realized that the hunter had tricked him. Bartolome was furious. "You tricked me", he roared. "But the animal world is not devious like you humans" he bellowed. "I will hold up my end of the bargain." "You will have your one year of guaranteed life." "But if you miss one day of fish and berries you will die instantly", Bartolome warned.
Bartolome opened his pouch of magic stones and selected a green and and a blue one. When he struck them together a flash of golden light surrounded the old hunter. Then Bartolome selected a black and white stone. When he struck the black and the white stone together the power of the earth mixed with the golden light and as one they entered the old hunters body. "There", said Bartolome. "you have your one year of life." "But, beware, my power is only good as far as your health is concerned". I cannot guarantee you a safe passage in life."
"Now", said Bartolome. "While you get dressed I will go to the stream for water." After the old bear left the cave the old hunter began to eye the old bear's magic pouch. If I can steal those stones he thought, I can give myself eternal life and I won't need that stupid old bear. He put his hand inside the pouch to steal the stones and found one other item in the bag. That item was a large Diamond Back rattle snake that Bartolome used in his magic incantations.
The smoke of burning venom when mixed with the color of the clashing stones was the final touch of magic that gave eternal life. The poison of the venom when injected into his hand was the final touch that gave the old hunter eternal death.
The Alchemist came to turn
my heart of iron
into a heart of gold
but God stepped in
and turned my heart
to love
written for Sunday scribblings
We tend to be greedy, don't we. Nicely illustrated in the story.
ReplyDeleteI was hooked from the beginning. Well done.
ReplyDeleteThe ever greedy man...Well lot to learn from this.A different take on the topic.
ReplyDeleteI agree with Carina, It's an entrancing story.
ReplyDeleteLilibeth...unfortunately greed is ruling the world
ReplyDeleteCarina & Elisha - thanks, I appreciate the "hooked" comment, I always love it when one of my little stories catches a reader's mind.
ReplyDeleteyou sure have a string in those words that ties readers down :)
ReplyDeletesong - trickery, deceit and greed seem to be the theme of the world of today.
ReplyDeleteLaila.. That is a great line .."a string in those words that ties a read down" awesome
ReplyDeletenice response..thank you...thank you...thank you
...a heart of gold is so much better...and God does a great job of that kind of metamorphosis. Your opening lines said it all.
ReplyDeleteViviali..thanks...I appreciate your words and time
ReplyDeleteSuccumming to temptation often has dire consequences
ReplyDeleteI too was hooked. Even when I figured out where it was going I was fascinated to find out how you got us there. We always want more, don't we? Thanks for stopping by and leaving kind words.
ReplyDeleteStan......temptation and greed and thievery
ReplyDeleteis fun until you get caught or bit.
Dee...always enjoy what you write..thanks for dropping by.
ReplyDeleteA timely and tidy tale! Enjoyed the read!
ReplyDeleteThanks Tumblewords...I am always excited when you take a minute with my words.
ReplyDeleteA cautionary tale. I have a soft spot for fables.
ReplyDeleteCool story! Cleverly told!!
ReplyDeleteWow, this was right up my alley (or should I say, "mountain trail.") Delightful fable, and well-told. I love stories about animals and nature.
ReplyDeleteWhat a delightful fable -- right up my alley (or mountain trail, as the case may be ;) ), and so well-told. I love stories about animals and nature.
ReplyDeleteGreat fable, and I like the way the venom was the final touch for both eternal life and eternal death!
ReplyDeleteKate
The thing I like about your stories is that I imagine you as the protagonist. How could you cheat those furry critters in the woods!
ReplyDeleteAndy...thanks for dropping by
ReplyDeleteThomma...great name..thanks for your comment
Kate..it's intresting how a good thing used or taken the wrong way can turn out deadly.
oldegg...I am a champion for the animals and I try to make sure they come out on top. In this fable the bear stands up to his word even though he has been tricked and the cheating human is the loser.
Oh, great story. I really enjoyed it. Glad the bear came out on top.
ReplyDeleteone must always be careful when approaching a bear...beautiful post...
ReplyDeleteThis was a wonderful, cautionary tale. I particularly loved the ending poem.
ReplyDeleteGreed will never win out.
Great story - it had the air of an established fable..Jae (thanks for your visit)
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